I felt my heart stop thumping
for that moment when I heard
my daughter had been murdered
by a successful suicide bombers mission.
my head suddenly exploded
with thoughts of how this could happen,
along with the feeling of disbelief.
I hear her soft voice,
from that morning, “bye mom, love you.
I will see you tonight,” as she bidded me goodbye.
little did I know, that was the last time I heard her
and the last time I saw her beautiful being.
her long black hair tied in a high ponytail and her dark skin glowed.
that morning was also the last time I fel her warming touch when she hugged me
and felt her warm luscious lips against my forehead,
like a light butterfly kiss.
remembering my daughter,
made my eyes immediately shed salty tears, angrily yelling and asking God,
“why my daughter, why did this have to happen to her?”
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I believe this accurately captures what goes through a parents mind when they first learn of their child's death, the blatent disbelief that it could ever happen and the realization that they will never see their child again.
ReplyDeletei am very impressed with your style and use of figurative language. This poem is truley a masterpiece in the classic sense of the word. The imageery you used to describe the daughter was vivid and added to the emotion of her loss. I am glad i had the privlage to read this poem today as it helps me to refelct on the fragility of mankind's mortality
ReplyDeleteWow Laura! I love the intense imagery and sensory words you used to draw your reader into this private experience. My favorite lines were "my head suddenly exploded / with thoughts of how this could happen." You have some very powerful line breaks that make every word and evey line significant. Great job!
ReplyDeleteLaura! I like the point of view you chose to write from, I don't know anyone else who did it that way. The poem has such good word choice. . . the poem is so sad and realistic! I also liked how you ended with a question.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was continually tugging at my heart! your word choice and use of imagery made everything seem like it was happeing to the reader. great descriptions!
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