I am a poem colorful and long
But some days i wish i were a song
I can rhyme or have prose
but its best when it flows
Haku or Limerik I take many forms
Many people hate i am out of the norm
Its hard being a poem and that the truth
step into my shoes and i will show you
Nice poem Ben... i really how you took on the perspective of a poem because i can only imagine how hard it would be being made fun of all the time for being outside "the norm." I also like your use of color, it really adds something. :)
ReplyDeleteBen, you are an artist in true form. Everything you do just makes me want to be your friend even more. your poem made my day and i live to see you everyday.
ReplyDeleteHahaha i agree with jackson, you are truly one of the most influential poets of our generation. I like the rhyme scheme you used and i just think your poem is the bees knees, dont change anything about it
ReplyDeletei like jacksons comment .... but Ben this is really nice i like all the rhymes yo put into it its really nice
ReplyDeletewow. this is inspriational
ReplyDeletethe poem itself is touching but then the color adds a whole new dimension of deepness. i like how you invite the reader in and give them something to think about. the ryhme scheme also works very well. good work
ha ha so true!
ReplyDeletei am in a fan of poems, reading them or writing them. so i am glad someone brought that to light.
Ben, creative way to address the burden poem assignment - it's kind of funny writing a poem from the perspective of a poem, and clearly many of your readers identify with it. The rhyme works well with it - accentuating the fact that it is from a poem's perspective. A couple pieces of advice...either make all the "I's" capital or lowercase, and Haiku is misspelled.
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