the world keeps spinning, spinning,
spinning.
the life on the planet always goes on,
continuing
destruction and devastation disappear in
the yesteryear,
and all that is left is the here and
now.
every moment untouched, unscathed, unsoiled,
new and ready for memories unspoiled.
there is no future. there is no past.
live every moment as the
last.
Maura, i really like the repetitive use of spinning in the beginning, it was an exciting way to start! The rest of your poem is very short and to the point, which i like. your message gets across very clearly. Good Job!!
ReplyDeleteI think you wrote this poem very well! i love the inner rhyme and i love the deeper meaning also. I like the fact that you say to take the present moment for what it is. I think if people forgot the past wrongs and forgave then more peace could be reached in the future
ReplyDeleteMaura, nice format for this poem. I like the emphasis on the single words and the rhyme and rhythm of this piece. Plus, you have an excellent message embedded in this poem. I would like to see more imagery though.
ReplyDeleteThe last line is a great piece of advice to follow.
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