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These are posts from Juniors at Steamboat Springs High School

The poems were written during our unit on Imperialism in the Middle East - Enjoy!

Wednesday, December 16, 2009

Good Wishes By: Natalie Geer

Allow your restless soul be free,
Feel Mother Earth beneath you feet.
And as you run,
Run with life.
A valiant triumph; each breath you take,
A kingship: each friend you make.
Spread your wings, fly away,
Enjoy each moment,
Enjoy each day.
Namaste.
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9 comments:

  1. Shane KinneyDecember 16, 2009 at 4:34 PM

    This is just great, Molto Bene ( very good). I love the peaceful feeling this makes, Spread your wings, fly away, gives a really great feeling as well as enjoy each moment, enjoy each day. The only thing I want to know is what Namaste means other than that I really enjoyed it.

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  2. cassady daleyDecember 16, 2009 at 4:44 PM

    I liked that the whole poem revolved around peace and earth. you didn't use any useless words so it made the poem more powerful!

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  3. LilyDecember 16, 2009 at 6:17 PM

    I loved how your poem rhymed at the very end. It made the end very powerful. The way that you broke up the lines also made it seem calm and portrayed the meaning well.

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  4. crystalmDecember 16, 2009 at 7:24 PM

    I love this poem! I especially like the line "Spread your wings, fly away" because it just sums up what you were talking about with running. A very deep and powerful poem!

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  5. Bobby GDecember 17, 2009 at 10:48 AM

    I enjoyed your poem as it made me feel very relaxed and green. It can very well be one of those poems that you read in the morning and you feel great the rest of the day. Great job.

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  6. B.ConroyDecember 17, 2009 at 7:21 PM

    Natalie, I like how your poem expressed deepeer meaning about life. If you think about it, this poem can be used everyday in life to guide you through the good times, and the bad times. The poem also made me feel peaceful with myself and the earth around me. Nice job!

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  7. mschallerDecember 17, 2009 at 9:34 PM

    After thourough evaluation of the syntax of this poem, i have come to the conclusion that you should become a poet. The mood that it incites is one of peace, joy, and tranquility, and it flows very very well. i also like your tie in of namaste, very clever. Smashing job nat!

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  8. Natalie GeerDecember 18, 2009 at 9:53 AM

    Haha oh gosh Maxx. That made me laugh. haha

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  9. Mrs. BellJanuary 1, 2010 at 10:44 PM

    Natalie, Nice work! This is a wonderful poem for a prayer flag. Cassady is right about you eliminating any useless words to make it concise and meaningful. I was wondering about your use of the colon and semicolon in the 5th and 6th lines...though poetry doesn't need to follow standard grammatical rules, I wondered why you chose those two pieces of punctuation to place there. I like the line about "a kingship; each friend you make." Our lives would be so much more peaceful if we would just remember your advice!

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