don't we all wish this? it is amazing to me, how an idea can be communicated and heard but to actually solve a problem is so much more difficult and strenuous. i liked it a lot! (:
I too like your message. The poem makes it feel like a simple message, but it isn't. I especially like the line "Don't fall prey to silence." I would like to see you use more imagery and figurative language in your poem, though.
don't we all wish this? it is amazing to me, how an idea can be communicated and heard but to actually solve a problem is so much more difficult and strenuous. i liked it a lot! (:
ReplyDeleteAwesome rhyme scheme! I like how you took a simple poem, but gave it it a deeper meaning that makes you think about the condition of the world.
ReplyDeleteI too like your message. The poem makes it feel like a simple message, but it isn't. I especially like the line "Don't fall prey to silence." I would like to see you use more imagery and figurative language in your poem, though.
ReplyDelete